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情景設定：學校運動全正在進行之中。校廣播臺“榮辱廣角鏡”欄目小記者蕭鳴看到了下面兩組鏡頭。鏡頭一：男子接力比賽最后一棒，二班王強同學跌倒受傷，仍然堅持跑到了終點。鏡頭二：賽場周圍，有部分同學說笑嬉鬧，還將剩余的飲食和廢棄物隨手亂扔。假設你是蕭鳴，請你從上面兩組鏡頭中任選一組，并根據其內容為校廣播臺寫一篇80詞左右的短訊。

要求：1．確定并圍繞所選鏡頭進行表達，短訊內容應給予情景想象和細節擴展；

2．對所選的鏡頭要有個人觀點，提出表揚、倡議或批評、建議；

3．詞數80詞左右，開始語已給出(不計入詞數)。

提示詞語：(鏡頭一)last lap, fall, hurt, get up, go on, shout, give up, highly,

(鏡頭二)out of, talk, laugh, waste, play, take part in, environment．

School sports meeting was still going on ________________________

Reported by Xiao Ming

Answer 1

答案：
解析：

　　Writing：(One possible version)

　　Scene one：It was the last lap of the boys' 100-metre race! All the runners were trying their best to run fast．Suddenly, Wang Qiang, the runner from Class 2, fell and hurt his leg．But he didn't give up．Instead, he got up and went on running to the

finishing line．All the teachers and students shouted "Come on!" to him and spoke

highly of him．

　　I think we should learn from Wang Qiang-Never give up, and try our best to do well in everything．(85 words)

　　Scene two：But out of the playground, a few of the students were talking and laughing loudly．Some students were even playing cards under the trees．It seemed that the sports meeting had nothing to do with them．Some food and drinks were not eaten or drunk up but wasted．Lots of litter could also be seen here and there．

　　I think everyone should take an active part in the sports meeting．It is also our duty to protect the environment around us．(80 words)

　　評分應以鼓勵學生表達為原則。依據學生表達的內容初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量確定，最后給分。

　　1、評分要點：

　　Scene one：①正在進行的比賽；2分；

　�、谕鯊姷�倒受傷；2分；

　　③王強沒有放棄比賽；2分；

　�、儆^眾對王強行為的反應；2分；

　�、圩髡哂^點；2分。

　　Scene two：①賽場以外的地方；2分；

　�、谏贁低瑢W的娘鬧行為；2分；

　　③浪費現象；2分；

　　①亂扔垃圾現象；2分；

　�、葑髡哂^點；2分。

　　2．給分范圍和要求：

　　A檔：(10－12)80詞左右；緊扣主題；內容充實；語言基本無誤；行文連貫；表達清楚。

　　B檔：(7～9)70詞左右；主題明確；內容較充實；語言錯誤不多；表達較清楚。

　　C檔：(4～6)60詞以下；主題明確；內容單薄；語言錯誤多；表達有欠缺。

　　D檔：(0～3)20詞以下；只能寫出少量語句；主題不明；內容松散．