Question

假設你是David，九年級學生。你打算寫一篇介紹自己近況的短文，請根據下面的要點提示，說明自己的情況，并談談自己的心愿。詞數100詞左右.
要點提示：

性格	勤勞，從不介意為班級多做一些額外工作，樂于助人；
喜好	最喜歡電影明星成龍，認為他是世界上最有天賦的演員之一，喜歡買與他有關的書籍，CD等；
麻煩	無法做到既認真學習又有時間從事自己的愛好，父母不理解他，只關心考試后的分數。
心愿	(1)…;   (2) …

My name is David.                                                              
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                

Answer 1

My name is David. I’m a student of Grade Nine./I’m a Grade Nine/9 student. I’m helpful and hard-working. I never mind doing extra work for my class.
I have many hobbies, such as/for example, playing basketball, reading, swimming. To tell you the truth, I like watching/seeing films best./My favourite hobby is watching/seeing films. My favourite film star is Jacky Chan. I think he is one of the most talented actors in the world. I like buying books and CDs about him. I spend most of my pocket money on them. But my parents don’t understand me. They only care about my marks after tests. I can’t achieve a balance between my hobbies and study.
I wish my parents could understand me./I hope my parents can understand me. I need their support and understanding. I plan to talk with my teachers, my friends or youth workers about my problems. Maybe I can get help from them.

試題分析：這是一篇表格作文。本文要求按照題目要求結合表格中的內容完成這篇自我介紹的作文寫作，我們要用恰當的語言把所列舉的內容準確地表達出來。寫作中要包含自己的情況，其中包括性格、喜好和遇到的麻煩，以及自己的心愿等幾個方面進行陳述等。根據材料內容可知本文主要是一般現在時態，人稱主要是第一人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關系。
【亮點說明】這篇短文簡明、扼要地闡明了自己的基本信息，并包含了表格中所要求的基本信息，并表達出了自己的心愿。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，連接詞和過渡語的使用為文章增色不少.如I never mind doing extra work，To tell you the truth,，one of the most talented actors in the world，achieve a balance between my hobbies and study，plan to talk with my teachers，But，such as/for example, I think， only，Maybe，學習中再注意總結，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理。