Question

假定英語課上老師要求同桌之間交換修改作文，請你修改你同桌寫的以下作文。
文中共有10處語言錯誤，每句中最多有兩處。每處錯誤僅涉及一個單詞的增加、刪除
或修改。
增加：在缺詞處加一個漏字符號（∧），并在其下面寫出該加的詞。
刪除：把多余的詞用斜線〔\〕劃掉。
修改：在錯的詞下劃一橫線，并在該詞下面寫出修改后的詞。
注意：1.每處錯誤及其修改均僅限一詞；
2.只允許修改10處，多者（從第11處起）不計分。
One day, my whole family went to climb the big hill. My father and mother told my elder
sister and I that the first one to get to the top of the hill would be give a toy. Hear this, we
began to run up. At first I kept ahead, but a few minute later my sister was ahead me.
However, I didn’t give up. I reached the top firstly in the end. We enjoy the beautiful
scenery and had a picnic on the top of the hill. I was the most happiest one all the time,
because I not only won a toy and also learnt that one shouldn’t give up easily.

Answer 1

One day, my whole family went to climb the big hill. My father and mother told my elder
a
sister and I that the first one to get to the top of the hill would be give a toy. Hear this, we
me                                          given     Hearing
began to run up. At first I kept ahead, but a few minute later my sister was ahead∧ me.
minutes                   of
However, I didn’t give up. I reached the top firstly in the end. We enjoy the beautiful
first             enjoyed
scenery and had a picnic on the top of the hill. I was the most happiest one all the time,
because I not only won a toy and also learnt that one shouldn’t give up easily.
but

解析【小題1】此處是初次提高，用不定冠詞表泛指。
【小題2】I改為me，與my elder a sister一起充當(dāng)told的賓語。
【小題3】give改為given，此處要用被動語態(tài)。
【小題4】hear改為hearing，現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語。
【小題5】a few后要接名詞復(fù)數(shù)。
【小題6】ahead of在……前面
【小題7】文章敘述的是過去的事，改為enjoyed。
【小題8】沒有firstly這種形式，要改為first。
【小題9】most 與后面的happiest都是最高級，重復(fù)。
【小題10】與前面的not only搭配。