Question

 請以“One person I’m grateful to”為題，用英語寫一篇100—120個詞的短文，記述一個你認為值得感謝的人。要求如下：

1. 內容必須結合生活中的一個事例;

2. 簡要說明值得感謝的原因或從中得到的啟示；

3. 文中不得透漏個人信息。

注意：文章的標題已給出（不計詞數）。

One Person I’m Grateful to

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

We are supposed to be grateful to people who are always there with us because they are the charming gardeners who make our souls blossom.

My English teacher is such a great soul, to whom I owe many thanks. During the previous study, my biggest flaw must come to carelessness, which worried me a lot. To make matters worse, I was too anxious to seek the fundamental reason for my failure. I just dedicated myself to huge amounts of practice, regardless of repeated mistakes. Fortunately, my teacher noticed it and offered to have a long talk with me. Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessness and gained confidence as well.

I am grateful to my English teacher for all the support he has given me, which has made me stronger and a better person.

【解析】

試題分析：本文主語開放性的作文，話題是“One person I’m grateful to”。這個人可以是現實中的人也可以是文學作品中某個人物。考生可以敘述身邊人物的具體事例來說明自己感激的人的具體品質。在范文中，作者選擇了自己的英語老師為例。在完成開放性作文時，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內，選擇句式時要賦予變化，因為這樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點組織成一個完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發表個人觀點的時候，可以使用諺語來提升整個文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

【亮點說明】本文最大的亮點在于高級詞匯的使用，如be supposed to do sth應該做某事； dedicate oneself to….專心于…；regardless of不管，不顧…；gain confidence贏得自信；高級句式的使用也較為頻繁，如which worried me a lot.中的which引導的是非限制性定語從句。以及Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessness and gained confidence as well.中的非謂語動詞having been persuaded…用法。

考點：考察開放性作文