Question

在3月5日學(xué)雷鋒紀(jì)念日這天，你校組織志愿者去慶豐敬老院開(kāi)展“學(xué)雷鋒, 送溫暖”活動(dòng)。假如你是志愿者學(xué)生張杰，請(qǐng)你將活動(dòng)情況介紹給美國(guó)朋友Kevin，與他分享你的美好經(jīng)歷。
活動(dòng)內(nèi)容見(jiàn)下表:

活動(dòng)時(shí)間	3月5日
活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)	慶豐敬老院（Qingfeng Old People’s Home）
參加人員	學(xué)校志愿者
活動(dòng)形式	1. 送去鮮花和水果 2. 幫助打掃衛(wèi)生 3. 陪老人唱歌、跳舞、聊天 4. 送去美好祝愿 5. ……
活動(dòng)感想	關(guān)愛(ài)老人，尊重（respect）老人

 要求：
1. 短文應(yīng)包括表中所有要點(diǎn), 可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名等相關(guān)信息；
3. 文章不少于80詞。開(kāi)頭、結(jié)尾已給出。
Dear Kevin,
Thank you for your last e-mail. Let me tell you what we did on 5th March in our school.
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If you have the chance in China, I hope you can join us.
Yours,  
Zhang Jie

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Kevin,
Thank you for your last e-mail. Let me tell you what we did on 5th March in our school.
As soon as we volunteers got to Qingfeng Old People’s Home, they gave us a warm welcome. We brought some flowers and fruits to the old people. We cleaned the windows and swept the floor for them. Then we sang and danced. How happy we were! After that, we sat together chatting with each other and gave our best wishes to them. The old people were very excited. When it was time for us volunteers to leave, they were grateful for our kindness. But I felt it our duty to care for the old people and respect them.
If you have the chance in China, I hope you can join us.
Yours, 
Zhang Jie

試題分析：本文內(nèi)容要求你以張杰的身份給筆友Kevin寫(xiě)一封信，說(shuō)說(shuō)你在在3月5日學(xué)雷鋒紀(jì)念日這天，你校組織志愿者去慶豐敬老院開(kāi)展“學(xué)雷鋒, 送溫暖”活動(dòng)的情況。所以應(yīng)該用第一人稱we，一般過(guò)去時(shí)。根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示，靈活采用不同的表達(dá)方式將活動(dòng)內(nèi)容和個(gè)人感受等各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文是一封信，內(nèi)容是描寫(xiě)作為志愿者參加一次“學(xué)雷鋒, 送溫暖”活動(dòng)的經(jīng)歷。以時(shí)間先后為序，用，不錯(cuò)。用一個(gè)短語(yǔ)As soon as說(shuō)明一開(kāi)始受到的歡迎。用里一系列的動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)來(lái)說(shuō)明做的事。最后用了感嘆句How happy we were!. When引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句等較復(fù)雜的句子。
考點(diǎn): 提綱類(lèi)作文。