Question

約翰(John)過去學(xué)習(xí)不太好，父母為此經(jīng)常生氣，他甚至想放棄學(xué)習(xí)。但在老師和同學(xué)們的幫助下，他下決心努力學(xué)習(xí)。現(xiàn)在他變了很多，各科成績(jī)都很好，并且成了班上的好學(xué)生。請(qǐng)以Never give up為題，用英語寫一篇80詞左右的短文，號(hào)召大家不要輕言放棄，要變問題為挑戰(zhàn)，勇敢面對(duì)。(語句通順，字跡工整)
                                                                               
                                                                                     
                                                                                     
                                                                                     
                                                                                     
                                                                                     

Answer 1

The student John did not study hard and the grades were so bad .And his parents were angry with him. Even he made his mind to give up his study, but he has made some change and the grades in all subjects are very good with the help of the teacher and his classmates. Suprisely, he has become the best student in his class. From that we must study hard and not say the words “give up”. We can meet the difficulty and make the challenge.

試題分析：在寫作時(shí)可分三步進(jìn)行：1，審題構(gòu)思。通過審題，確定文章體裁和時(shí)態(tài)。本篇作文是記敘文，主要寫約翰過去學(xué)習(xí)不好，甚至想放棄，后來在老師和同學(xué)的幫助下發(fā)生了很大變化，故主體時(shí)態(tài)是一般過去時(shí)和現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)，同時(shí)要注意不能遺漏提供的要點(diǎn)，并可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。2，列舉要點(diǎn)not study hard， give up his study，with the help of the teacher and his classmates，become the best等等。3，連詞成句、連句成篇。在進(jìn)行此步驟時(shí)，應(yīng)注意使用一些連接過渡詞，以使文章更流暢、自然。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文語句平實(shí)，但流暢自然，完全表達(dá)了題目中的要點(diǎn)。